Post by ☼Light of the Sea☼ on Jul 26, 2007 15:32:11 GMT -5
Hey, all, it's me again. 
I have been given permission by Hawk to write some Roleplay and Writing tips, so here goes...
Try to make them as detailed as possible, and use as many pronouns that make sense. For instance, instead of just going, 'she walked to the store. She bought ice cream. She felt nice. She walked back.' write 'The young girl walked to the store to buy ice cream. She felt nice to be able to buy the ice cream. Kammy walked back.' The second example used three different words to describe 'Kammy' - the young girl, she, and the name Kammy.
Now for detail. Put in what they see, hear, feel, taste, and smell. A bad example, although worthwhile for the story, would be this.
The white cat walked to and fell asleep under a tree.
The usual type for roleplays especially is this:
The white cat trotted over to the shade of the tree and curled up under it in order to fall asleep. She was tired, and the shade felt nice as sleep claimed her. The she-cat had recently been in a battle, but she still rested nicely under the tree's leaves.
That's pretty good detail, but you can make it better. Write about the four senses, and add more detail to how she walked and what she felt.
The white cat loped slowly over towards an oak tree. Her head was bowed, and there was a limp to her step, as though she was hurt. Her blue eyes were cast towards the ground, as though she couldn't bare to look up. The shade that the oak cast was disappearing rapidly in the darkness, but nevertheless it was hot and it felt nice against the white pelt of the she-cat. The young cat gently curled up underneath the tree, trying not to put too much weight onto her leg. She raised her muzzle to gaze up at the heavens, her green eyes filling with tears. The leaves of the tree rustled overhead, as though to whisper her to sleep. The grass underneath the white she-cats fur was long and soft, creating a great bed for her, although her mind was so muddled with thoughts she barely noticed it. The fresh smell of nature reached her, lulling the young cat into a small sense of comfort. She opened her jaw slightly to let the small breeze cool it from the lurking blood left from the battle. Her green eyes still gazed at the heavens, reflecting the glittering stars that were scattered throughout the night sky. Oh StarClan, she prayed, why did you have to let him die? The stars themselves did nothing to answer the white cat, and she gently lay down her head to fall asleep.
As you can see, you can greatly stretch out the one sentence that we first had.
I hope this helps you with your writing and roleplaying skills.
~Light OTS~
I have been given permission by Hawk to write some Roleplay and Writing tips, so here goes...Try to make them as detailed as possible, and use as many pronouns that make sense. For instance, instead of just going, 'she walked to the store. She bought ice cream. She felt nice. She walked back.' write 'The young girl walked to the store to buy ice cream. She felt nice to be able to buy the ice cream. Kammy walked back.' The second example used three different words to describe 'Kammy' - the young girl, she, and the name Kammy.
Now for detail. Put in what they see, hear, feel, taste, and smell. A bad example, although worthwhile for the story, would be this.
The white cat walked to and fell asleep under a tree.
The usual type for roleplays especially is this:
The white cat trotted over to the shade of the tree and curled up under it in order to fall asleep. She was tired, and the shade felt nice as sleep claimed her. The she-cat had recently been in a battle, but she still rested nicely under the tree's leaves.
That's pretty good detail, but you can make it better. Write about the four senses, and add more detail to how she walked and what she felt.
The white cat loped slowly over towards an oak tree. Her head was bowed, and there was a limp to her step, as though she was hurt. Her blue eyes were cast towards the ground, as though she couldn't bare to look up. The shade that the oak cast was disappearing rapidly in the darkness, but nevertheless it was hot and it felt nice against the white pelt of the she-cat. The young cat gently curled up underneath the tree, trying not to put too much weight onto her leg. She raised her muzzle to gaze up at the heavens, her green eyes filling with tears. The leaves of the tree rustled overhead, as though to whisper her to sleep. The grass underneath the white she-cats fur was long and soft, creating a great bed for her, although her mind was so muddled with thoughts she barely noticed it. The fresh smell of nature reached her, lulling the young cat into a small sense of comfort. She opened her jaw slightly to let the small breeze cool it from the lurking blood left from the battle. Her green eyes still gazed at the heavens, reflecting the glittering stars that were scattered throughout the night sky. Oh StarClan, she prayed, why did you have to let him die? The stars themselves did nothing to answer the white cat, and she gently lay down her head to fall asleep.
As you can see, you can greatly stretch out the one sentence that we first had.
I hope this helps you with your writing and roleplaying skills.
~Light OTS~
